Create-A-Character Thread and FF

[Susano'o the Storm God]

Originally Posted by hokage333

wacha guys think about Akina?

meh. I think we need some weaker characters. Not everyone is strong so it makes sense to have Hinata lvl characters. Just be careful and make sure they don't become Tenten lvl...

[hokage333]

i tired making her weak...but she becam the strongest one.

its more of the fact she has alot of easy to see weaknesses

[Susano'o the Storm God]

Originally Posted by hokage333

i tired making her weak...but she becam the strongest one.

its more of the fact she has alot of easy to see weaknesses

then again characters like her have to pretty well hidden during a battle or else they'll be screwed as soon as they attack, considering that all the antagonists are able to deal with long-range types pretty easily. Senko can teleport, Kuroshi could use his sweeping darkness or oblivion, Kawa is a long range fighter already, and Zangei has a few mid-long range attacks.

[Hiro Hikari]

Sorry I haven't done much yet guys! I've been a bit distracted with other things lately. School starting, job, etc. I'll have to go over everyone's characters and then write something up. So far, my basic idea is that Ryuu's team and Kusaaijin are sent on seperate missions by their village to report on a mysterious ninja, Narako. Meanwhile, Kurai and Surrashu are sent to take down, and if possible capture, Kurai and his group, who are planning to recruit, or if necessary, kill Narako. There might be a bit of romace in there as well, but I'm still not sure. I might post fights that will occur in the FF later tonight or tomorrow. Stay strong you guys!

[Hiro Hikari]

Wow! I got that done quicker than I thought I would!

Kusaaijin vs Ryuu, Yoshi, Akina
Kurai, Surasshu vs Kuroshi, Zangei, Kawa, Senko
Narako vs Kuroshi
Kusaaijin vs Zangei
Yoshi vs Kawa
Kurai vs Senko
Surasshu vs Narako
Ryuu vs Kuroshi
Yoshi, Akina, vs Kensaki
Kusaaijin vs Kensaki

Take a note that these aren't final and they might change/there might be more fights added. The ??? is a character that I hope I can also get done tonight.
I have an epically basic plotline for what's going to happen along with what I posted a couple minutes ago. I'm trying to squeeze in everyone as best I can. Let`s hope I can make you all happy.

[Hiro Hikari]

Once again, quicker than I thought I would

Name:Kensaki
Rank:None
Age:23
Gender:Male
Village:Unknown, somewhere in the Land Of Iron
Physical Description:6 feet tall, head wrapped in bandages with only his blue eyes visible and blue hair poking out in some places, open dark blue coat that reaches his waist in the front and his ankles in the back, grey shorts that reach just below the knees, wears geta (a japanese wooden platform sandal) on his feet, every part of his skin is covered in bandages
History:No one knows who this man is, where he came from, or what his history is. Several people believe he is from a village in the Land of Iron that was burned down by a group of rouge ninja near the end of the Third Great Shinobi World War. No one has seen what lies beneath his bandages. He wanders the land doing nothing in particular, fighting any shinobi and bandit along the way. He acts relatively normal in public areas such as hotels, restaurants, etc. He seems to heavily obey the bushido code.
Personality:People claim that he shows no emotion, yet they say he acts like a gentlemen, even when fighting.
Ninjutsu:None
Genjutsu:None
Taijutsu:None
Weapons:A katana and a wakizashi, both of which have a black handle and a guard shaped like a five-point star that he keeps on his waist
Kekkai Genkai:None
Other:People who survive after fighting him say that before the fight begins, he declares that he would not use chakra in their battle.

Ninjutsu:0 Taijutsu:0 Genjutsu:0 Intelligence:5 Strength:5 Speed:5 Stamina:5 Hand Seals:0 Total:20

This is the character represented by the ??? in the list of fights. He won't be a main antagonist, but he will be important.

[MichaelUchiha360]

Name:Yukianesa Rose
Rank:Jonin
Age:24
Gender:Female
Village:Hidden Leaf
Physical Description:Blonde, blue eyes,5 foot 1, wears a jonin outfit with a skirt, has a blue leaf headband and sword.
History:The Rose clan has always been in the shadows, however Yukianesa swears to avenge their pride by becoming a female hokage. When her brother, Lir, died of an incurable illness, she started becoming depressed. Following the death of Okishuso Uchiha, she began to start training harder and eventually Okishuso's eyes helped her see the light that had never reached her eyes due to her blindness.
Personality:She shows no emotion
Ninjutsu:She knows a lot of various techniques.
Genjutsu:Tsukuyomi
Taijutsu: Forest Lotus
Weapons:Katana
Kekkai Genkai:Bloodcrest
Other:N/A

[Susano'o the Storm God]

Originally Posted by Hiro Hikari

Wow! I got that done quicker than I thought I would!

Kusaaijin vs Ryuu, Yoshi, Akina
Kurai, Surasshu vs Kuroshi, Zangei, Kawa, Senko
Narako vs Kuroshi
Kusaaijin vs Zangei
Yoshi vs Kawa
Kurai vs Senko
Surasshu vs Narako
Ryuu vs Kuroshi
Yoshi, Akina, vs Kensaki
Kusaaijin vs Kensaki

Take a note that these aren't final and they might change/there might be more fights added. The ??? is a character that I hope I can also get done tonight.
I have an epically basic plotline for what's going to happen along with what I posted a couple minutes ago. I'm trying to squeeze in everyone as best I can. Let`s hope I can make you all happy.

btw, how much intel do each of the characters know about each other? Intel could greatly affect the outcome (or not sometimes). Kuroshi and Narako are definately more mysterious so it would make sense if no one knows much about them except their allies.
Also, what the hell is with Narako and Kurai having to fight 4 akatsuki lvl characters?!?!
As with Narako vs Kuroshi, epic randomness? I'm gonna guess they both get away alive and well.
Kusaaijin vs Zangei Very odd match up. How is she gonna kill him by herself?!? Kurai is more fit for the job, or Kusaaijin and maybe Ryuu together.
Yoshi vs Kawa. I'm surprised you didn't make Kawa fight a fire user. I think you should have Zangei and Kawa switch opponents.
Kurai vs Senko. Interesting match up indeed. Kurai I could see being capable of handling Senko. You better give Kurai an epic way to defeat Senko despite being at an elemental disadvantage along with Senko being ridiculously fast.
Surassu vs Narako. Epic randomness???
Ryuu vs Kuroshi. Epic predictability. Hopefully Ryuu gets a power up...
Yoshi, Akina, vs Kensaki. ???
Kusaaijin vs Kensaki. ???
There's my feedback on all the fights. Is it just me, or are the antagonists getting killed to quickly? Kawa's and Zangei's match ups don't make sense. They over-power their opponent's by a big amount. Seriously, how the hell are freakin plants gonna beat ice, or freakin lava?!?! Kawa would jut rape Yoshi. Sure Yoshi could poison Kawa, but how the hell is he gonna do that if he can't even get close to Kawa. At least Kusaaijin would have an elemental advantage against Kawa.

[Hiro Hikari]

Originally Posted by MichaelUchiha360

Name:Yukianesa Rose
Rank:Jonin
Age:24
Gender:Female
Village:Hidden Leaf
Physical Description:Blonde, blue eyes,5 foot 1, wears a jonin outfit with a skirt, has a blue leaf headband and sword.
History:The Rose clan has always been in the shadows, however Yukianesa swears to avenge their pride by becoming a female hokage. When her brother, Lir, died of an incurable illness, she started becoming depressed. Following the death of Okishuso Uchiha, she began to start training harder and eventually Okishuso's eyes helped her see the light that had never reached her eyes due to her blindness.
Personality:She shows no emotion
Ninjutsu:She knows a lot of various techniques.
Genjutsu:Tsukuyomi
Taijutsu: Forest Lotus
Weapons:Katana
Kekkai Genkai:Bloodcrest
Other:N/A

First off, this isn't a big deal, but there isn't any information on her KG or her ninjutsu. If you're going to make another character, please do this. Second, No Sharingan. I know there is no rule that specifically prevents this, but it's not going to work. try and change her so that she doesn't have it, or just make a new character. Sorry.

[Hiro Hikari]

Originally Posted by Susano'o the Storm God

btw, how much intel do each of the characters know about each other? Intel could greatly affect the outcome (or not sometimes). Kuroshi and Narako are definately more mysterious so it would make sense if no one knows much about them except their allies.
Also, what the hell is with Narako and Kurai having to fight 4 akatsuki lvl characters?!?!
As with Narako vs Kuroshi, epic randomness? I'm gonna guess they both get away alive and well.
Kusaaijin vs Zangei Very odd match up. How is she gonna kill him by herself?!? Kurai is more fit for the job, or Kusaaijin and maybe Ryuu together.
Yoshi vs Kawa. I'm surprised you didn't make Kawa fight a fire user. I think Akina vs Kawa makes more sense considering that Kawa is a long-range fighter.
Kurai vs Senko. Interesting match up indeed. Kurai I could see being capable of handling Senko. You better give Kurai an epic way to defeat Senko despite being at an elemental disadvantage along with Senko being ridiculously fast.
Surassu vs Narako. Epic randomness???
Ryuu vs Kuroshi. Epic predictability. Hopefully Ryuu gets a power up...
Yoshi, Akina, vs Kensaki. ???
Kusaaijin vs Kensaki. ???
There's my feedback on all the fights.

The 'good guys' are going to know most of the info about each other. Same with the bad guys. The good guys are going to know some basic information about their enemies (name, village, element, etc) with the exception of Kuroshi. They're only going to know his name and the fact that he uses fire jutsu. Narako is just going to be mystery on a stick.
Kurai and Surrashu are going to have more of a confrontation than a battle with your group. The first two battles are just going to be a way to get everyone introduced.
Like I said when I gave the basic idea for the plot: Kuroshi's group is trying to get their hands on/kill Narako. And yes, they both get away just fine.
I'm going to fiddle with Zangei's jutsu a bit, if you don't mind. I just have an idea that Kusaaijin will be doing very well against Zangei, she'll still be injured heavily though, and Zangei will get angry and use Absolute/Absolute Zero in a suicide attempt to kill her. Then Ryuu, with help from everyone else, will save her. Like I said, there might be a bit of romance.
I noticed that Yoshi wasn't really doing anything, and I'm probably going to make Akina more of a minor character, so I just gave him a random fight. The fight might start off with Yoshi and Akina against Kawa and then Akina gets defeated.
I figured that Senko would get overconfident because of his element advantage, and that Kurai would beat the crap out of him.
Like I said with Yoshi,Surrashu and Narako weren't really doing much. Plus, I figured it would be a relatively interesting match-up seeing as they both use dogs/wolfs.
Ryuu vs Kuroshi is the good old fashion protagonist vs antagonist end of arc battle
The first fight with Kensaki is going to be more of a confrontation with Yoshi and Akina. Just a way to get him established.
I mostly made Kensaki as character important to Kusaaijin's past and as a way to make another conflict.
That's my response to your feedback to the fights.