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A Surprise For All
Probably, none of you know of me. I am Lil Hinata, an ex-regular on this site. I wrote many fan fictions here, and I thought I might revive one of my best ones from the dead, since this place has a little more activity, which I am glad it does. It has been years since I wrote this, but it is my favorite fanfiction I have written for this site. I hope that you people, new or old, who may or may not read this, will like it.
*No, I do not support the pairing in this piece. It was just a crack pairing that I liked the story line on. Enjoy ![]() A Suprise For All by Lil Hinata A teenaged Kunoichi was walking through the streets of Konoha, some bags in her arms. She had just got back from the grocery store and was going home, hoping her boyfriend was home. She blushed slightly with excitement. She was going to surprise the dark haired boy with this dinner. She smiled to herself, giggling lightly as she walked towards her apartment. She had been living with the raven-haired boy for a few months now, since he had returned. Just then, she heard her name being called with a deep, beautiful voice, which made her smile and blush slightly more. “Hinata-Chan!” Hinata turned with a gentle smile on her face as she saw the guy of her dreams. The boy walked up to her. He leaned down and brushed his lips against her cheek. Then only placed a small blush over her cheeks and a more beautiful to form on her face. “Hey, Sasuke-Kun,” She giggled. “Hey. What cha got there?” He asked in a soft time. He stood straight up, flashing a gentle smile her way. He placed a hand tenderly on her head and then began to slowly fun his fingers though her silky blue-black hair. “Oh this? Um…I was going to surprise you with a nice dinner…” She whispered softly. Sasuke chuckled a bit before taking the bags from her arms. “How about I make dinner for you, Hinata-Chan?” He asked, chuckling a bit to himself. Hinata smiled a little bit and nodded her head a little, showing she understood. She knew he was going to cook now. He did stuff like this from time to time. She began to think a bit about her passed boyfriend, Uzumaki Naruto. She gave a fake smile to Sasuke, telling him to go on home and get started. She told him she wanted to walk around some. He nodded his head, disappearing in a cloud of smoke. Hinata’s periwinkle eyes shifted to the ground as she poked her hands into the pockets of her purple and white jacket as she began to walk. Naruto had always helped her cook or cooked himself when they were together and lived in his apartment. To her surprise, he could make more than Ramen and could eat more than just Ramen. She gave a small sigh as a small tear ran down her cheek. Naruto was gone now. He had passed away when he, Shino, and herself were on an information-gathering mission in Iwagakure. Following them home, assassins had attacked them. They had fought for their lives but when Hinata brought the two boys back home, neither made it. Only she did and it had deeply saddened her. Shino was a close friend and Naruto was her boyfriend. But when hardly anyone would help, Sasuke and Kiba helped her the most. Then, Sasuke asked her to be his girlfriend and she accepted after a while. She was glad she did. She gave a small sigh and small smile. She looked up into the sky, hoping Naruto and Shino were looking down upon her and was happy with the choices she had made. She turned around and slowly started walking back towards her apartment, since dusk was just beginning. Ten minutes of walking and she reached her Apartment Complex. She walked up the stairs and down the rows of apartments to her door, 386. She took her key from her pocket and put it in the lock. Surprisingly, it was open. She shrugged it off, knowing Sasuke was home if it was unlocked. She opened the door and took a few steps inside but froze stiff, her lavender eyes wide with shock and fear. “S-Sasuke-Kun!” She screamed in panic as she rushed over to the body on the hardwood floor. She kneeled beside him, tears in her eyes as she saw his face. His dark black eyes were wide, as if staring at something in shock with blood dripping down his chin from the corner of her mouth. There was a hole in his chest. A crimson bloody hole in the middle of his chest. His heart had been ripped out of his chest with a hole left behind. Hinata picked up his cold, white hand and held it between her smaller hands. “Sasuke-Kun!” She cried as she fell, folding her arms on his chest and burring her face in her folded arms. She cried her heart out. She felt like her own heart was being ripped out like Sassuke's was. Why? Why was this happening to her? Why were all her friends being killed and taken away from her. She thought she would never know, but right now all she could do was mourn over the loss of her second boyfriend. Suddenly, Hinata heard something like a beating sound. Like the beating of the heart. She raised her tear-stained face and looked at the open door, her eyes widened and frightened as tears continued to stream down. She saw a dark figure with short hair that ended a bit above the shoulders leaning against the doorframe. A pair of grassy green eyes was piercing her gaze with a smirk on the figure's face. In the hand that was not folded over the chest, something that seemed to beat was in its hand. The figure threw it up into the air and caught it multiple times. Hinata stared before her body began to shake from fear and sadness as well. "S-S-Sakura?!" She cried out, crawling backwards a little bit. The figure moved and came into the tiny light in the room. The faint light illuminated brightened up the baby pink hair and grassy green eyes that seemed to beam with something never seen in those eyes. "Sasuke-Kun stole my heart all those years ago. Now, I have finally stolen his heart away," She said as she held the object in her hand towards the light. It was, in fact, Sasuke's heart. And it was still beating in her hand. Her hands were covered with dark crimson sticky liquid as she tossed his heart into the air and catching it again. She smiled like a meniac at Hinata before letting out a chuckle of evil.Hinata stared at Sakura. She knew what Sakura had meant but this was scary. And literal! She was talking about her being in love with Sasuke but she had ripped the heart out of his chest...and it was still beating! Hinata looked at her and gulped once. "S-Sakura! Y-you...Why!" She cried out, her voice just as soft as usual but had sadness tied in within her voice. "No one can have Sasuke's heart but me," She growled, chuckling like a murderer herself. "You stole him away after Naruto and Shino's death...Since I can't have him...You won't either, Hinata!" She said, stepping forward and unsheathing the sword that originally belonged to Sasuke himself. She took the heart in her left hand and the Katana in the second hand. Sakura narrowed her eyes and grinned evily. "Run," She whispered. Hinata took no chance. She instantly shot up and pushed passed Sakura. She ran out of the apartment and down the stairs, panting with her eyes wide with fear. She was screaming as she ran. Dried tears were still on her face. "I don't want to die! I don't want to die!" She screamed in panic as she ran away from the apartment complex to get away from the Kunoichi she thought was a friend. Behind her, Sakura was standing on the balcony, holding Sasuke’s bloody heart in the air. The beating of the heart had slowed and stopped, being still in her hand. She held the bloody Katana in the other hand, laughing mechanically to the heavens as a haze started to cover the earth like a fuzzy blanket covering a child on a cold winter morning. Sakura’s laughing faded as Hinata ran from it, scared for her life. What had happened to the friend she thought she knew? What happened to the girl Hinata had trusted? These answers, she would never get to know. Last edited by Lil Hinata : 07-12-2010 at 08:55 PM. |
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Very interesting. Is there more chapters to this, or was it just a one shot?
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good, very interesting.
im guessing naruto and sasukes deaths were not unrelated, but im probably wrong. anyway, very good chapter. |
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Sadly, this is a one shot I wrote many moons ago, haha. I wrote this maybe 2 or 3 years back or so. But, I thought some new comers may enjoy this piece, as much as I had writing it. Though it is dark, I loved it. But, thank you for the comments
I really appreciate it.EDIT: By the way, I apologize to you all. I was an idiot, and didn't put the rest of the story with it. So, there is more of an ending now, which should sum up a little bit of the mystery, haha. Hope you like my ending ![]() Last edited by Lil Hinata : 07-12-2010 at 08:53 PM. |
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Wow, that was.......weird.
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PLOT TWIST!!!!!!!!!
good things are good. |
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Hehe, thank you two for reading, and the comments. I know this isn't the BEST thing I have written grammer wise, but I loved the story. And I thought some of you may like it too
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