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12-17-2009, 02:18 PM
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Here I Stand!!!
Here I Stand Prologue Naruto has finally accomplished his goals of creating peace. Team 7 finally reunited and defeated Akatsuki. Naruto finally has complete control of the Nine Tailed Fox. The rest of the bijuu are where they belong and the village and it’s inhabitants are enjoying the beginning of a more peaceful era. But there are still some holes to fill some questions haven’t yet been answered. Tune in to find how this came to be and what the future holds for Naruto. Volume 1: The Fate of Team 7 Chapter 1:Announcement of the New Sannin Walking down the hall of the Hokage’s office our orange clad hero reflects on his return to the Hidden Leaf from Team 7’s fight with Madara Uchiha. "Sasuke! Do you have enough chakra for one more technique?" "Yes Naruto, I know where your going with this I think we can pull it off. But we only got one shot at this." Together they scream the names of their respective Jutsu’s. "RASENGAN!!! CHIDORI!!!" They thrust the 2 powerful techniques into the seal on Madara’s stomach and jump back narrowly avoiding the explosion of ultimate jutsu’s. Madara trying to hold in the power of an incomplete Juubi explodes and this causes all the tailed beast inside of him to be released and scattered all across the world. "Naruto we did it." Spoke the injured Uchiha. "Yeah. Now lets go home can you get us out of this dimension." The orange clad ninja responded. "I think I can. KAMUI!!!" As Sasuke yelled the name of the jutsu the spiral opened and sucked them both in instantly transporting them to the office of the hokage, where they landed violently on the floor. Not a second later Anbu’s burst through the door and carried Sasuke off and without a single word Sasuke was carried away in handcuffs with Naruto being carried by medical ninja’s to the hospital. Staring at his friend being taken away Naruto felt himself lose consciousness and slip into a deep sleep. "I hope he’s okay." Naruto thought to himself, broken out of the trance of past memories. "Now I’m being called to the Hokage’s office probably to decommissioned for taking everything into my own hands. But I refuse to regret the actions I took to protect myself, the one I care for and the peace of the world." Naruto said out loud. He burst through the door of the Hokage’s office immediately taking reviewing it’s occupants. Sakura, Sasuke, Tsunade the fifth hokage, Kakashi the sixth Hokage and every important jonin in the entire village. "Naruto, you were expected. Now sit down I have something things to discuss with you, Sasuke and Sakura." Said calmly by the Sixth Hokage. Naruto sat down beside his newly reunited team. Meanwhile Kakashi moved behind his desk and prepared to explain the state of the village and their status as ninja’s. Finally after a few moments of silence the silver haired ninja decided to speak. "Alright, I have a few announcements the first of which pertains to the S rank criminal Sasuke Uchiha and his brother Itachi. I am first of all pardoning them of their crimes as Itachi was forced to commit the deeds that he committed due to a conspiracy concocted by Danzo and the advisers Homura Mitomon and Koharu Utatane and Sasuke is now under official order of myself to have his actions accounted for as a classified S-rank mission." "My Second announcement pertains to my previous student and the three responsible for the defeat of Akatsuki and it’s leader. Effective immediately they have been promoted to the Jonin rank and here by bestowed the title of the legendary three." "Are there any questions?" Neji raised his hand and waited to be called on. "Yes, you may speak." The village leader said. The white eyed jonin glared at the Sasuke and Naruto intently as he asked his questions. "I would like to know why Sasuke has been essentially pardoned for his past crimes and I would also like to know why these promotions are more important than helping the reconstruction of the village." The fifth opened her mouth to speak but Kakashi held his hand up to stop her then he proceeded to explain why the current actions were to take place. " first off lets look at what Sasuke really did while he was a rogue. He infiltrated Orochimaru’s operations learning as much as he possibly could. Then he defeated and sealed away one of the leaf’s greatest enemies. Next, he defeated 2 members of Akastuki Deidara and Itachi. As a result of that there were 2 less members we had to take care of and it slowed Akatsuki’s gathering of Bijuu’s. His next action of infiltrating Akatsuki and capturing Killer Bee which in actuality threw Akatsuki off the jinchuriki’s tail and caused the meeting of the 5 Kage allowing us more allies to take action against Akatsuki. Then he defeated and killed Danzo who had forged the conspiracy of the Uchiha and had almost thrown the leaf into war with it’s newly acquired allies. Lastly he was key in defeating the incomplete Juubi and Madara Uchiha. So, most if not all his actions were more for the benefit of the Leaf than even himself." "Now, to answer your second question. Since it’s not allowed to send Chuunin and Genin out on missions by themselves the fifth and myself felt it would be a waste of talent and manpower to have teams babysitting these fully capable ninja’s especially with Naruto being in full control of the Kyuubi and both Sasuke and Naruto commanding Eternal Mangekyo Sharingans. So while these prominent battles are fresh in the mind of people we felt it best to promote them" "So, If there are no more questions. Everyone is dismissed." The flooded room full of ninja’s quickly became empty with the newly promoted Jonin’s being the last to leave. As they walk down the hall Sakura decided to speak. "So…. How about we celebrate, we should go to Ichiraku and down a couple of bowls of ramen." "Well I’m definitely up to it." Responded Sasuke. "Me too." Naruto spoke in agreement "But I gotta go to the hospital first I have to check up on someone." Sakura and Sasuke looked at Naruto with a look of wonder decided whether to probe their teammate for more info. But Naruto beat them too it and took off in a flash of yellow. ~End Of Chapter~ Last edited by codecatx5 : 12-19-2009 at 03:38 PM. 
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12-17-2009, 02:46 PM
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nice that was awesome
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12-17-2009, 04:59 PM
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Ehh the grammar isn't bad but there are some major story line errors.
1. How did Madara get the Juubi? That would require the 9-tailed fox and if Madara had the fox Naruto would be dead. 2.Preaty sure that Sasuke can't use the Kamui. It has been stated that each Mangekyo user unlocks one technique per eye with Susano'o only manifesting itslef in someone who has shone mastery only hisother 2 techniques, or something like that. Therefore Sasuke couldn't use the Kamui. 3. How did Tsunade wake up? And if she did wake up shouldn't she regain her mantle as Hokage? Kakashi even stated he didn't really want the job. 4. How did Sasuke get the Eternal Mangekyo? And for that matter how the heck did Naruto get it? In order to get the EMS you have to have the normal Mangekyo and then take your brothers eyes. Sasuke doesn't have access to Itachi's eyes and Naruto doesn't have a brother or even a normal Sharingan to begin with. 5. Actually Chunin are allowed to go on missions by themselvs. Look at the Sasuke retrival arc. Team can be sent out however the Hokage orders them to be. 6. How does every Jonin in the village manage to fit inside the Hokage's office?
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12-17-2009, 05:04 PM
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12-18-2009, 04:13 PM
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pretty good, just hope u tie up the lose ends, and if im correct[which i think i am] a bit of NARUxHinata action is gonna come up in that hospital.
but pretty good overall, just remeber to clarify how everything happened b4 u sart going deeper into the story.
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12-19-2009, 12:18 AM
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P.s I not saying your wrong about the NaruxHina action but I just hoping I didn't actually mention it and your just really good at guessing.
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12-19-2009, 12:33 PM
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Chapter 2: A Visit to the Hospital Meanwhile in the Konoha Hospital a kunai is thrown through a open window and a flash of yellow followed the kunai lodged in the wall. After a moment our unknown assailant walks over to the bed situated in the room to remove the covers revealing an awake Hinata Hyuga. "Naruto is that you?" Spoke the dark haired beauty. "Yeah, It’s me I was just wondering how you were doing." The orange clad hero revealing his identity. "I’m doing fine the doctors say I can start going back on missions in a few days. So is that all Naruto?" She said as she covers herself more with the sheet to hide a growing blush." "Yeah that’s all I came to find out." Our hero grabs his kunai and walks to the window but stops, as he forces his great reserves of courage to wash away the feelings of doubt, sadness and all insecurities he has on the subject he’s about to speak of. Even though he knew that his purpose in coming here was to talk about her feelings for him and even though he knew exactly how she felt it didn’t unease him. But when Naruto says he’s gonna do something not even a god can stop him. "Hinata?" The village hero asked. "Yes."The simple answer was all she could muster up as a response. "I…I can’t say I love you. Hinata even though I know you feel that way about me I just can’t say it back." "It’s okay Naruto I never expected you too. I …everyone always knew you have a crush on Sakura and everyone always knew I had a crush on you. I’ve come to except that I may never have you. But even so I couldn’t let anything happen to you… I couldn’t let you go without at least telling you how I feel." His comment and hers had tears welling in her eyes and at this moment she was glad that she could cover her face with her sheets. Naruto’s reaction was a lot different than was expected. It wasn’t one of sadness or somber or regret, It was more of a look of anger. He took a moment to compose his thoughts and then turned to Hinata edging ever so close to her. One moment he was at the window and the next moment their faces were less than an inch away from each other. "Hinata, I may not love you but that doesn’t mean I don’t care. I just need you to understand that I do want you and I do want to be with you. It’s just I can’t just instantly return the strong feelings you have for me. I know what the others will say and I can tell you now that this relationship is gonna be difficult. But that day when I thought I saw Pain kill you I didn’t think about losing the village or my friends. I saw Pain kill you, someone who helped me through my fight with Neji, someone who helped give me the confidence and determination I have, someone who inspired me through the strength of your will." At this point she couldn’t hold back the tears anymore. She was already in his warm embrace and as much as she was enjoying this moment she couldn’t help but feel that he wasn’t done and that it will probably get worse before it gets better. Boy was she wrong! Naruto gently held her chin up and he inched in closing the distance between their lips. The very romantic moment that was only enhanced by the beautiful moon shining on their faces only lasted for a short while but, from the intensity of the kiss they both could tell that this would change everything. "So… would you like to go out with me sometime Hinata?" She couldn’t help but let out a small giggle as she responded to the basically rhetorical question. "YES!!!" She moves in for the second make out session and of course Naruto does nothing but comply. Eventually out of breathe they both take a break and as Naruto looks at his watch he realizes something. "Crap!!!" I’m late for Ichiraku with Sasuke and Sakura. He spoke in a slight state of panic out of worry of seeing is friends upset at him and he didn’t want a repeat of Jiraiya’s beating at the hands of Tsunade. "Six ribs, both arms and a number of organs all destroyed. Oh god she’s gonna kill me!!!" Naruto shouted fearing for his soul. But then he got a very good idea. "Hey Hinata I know hospital food isn’t the best. So, how about you go with me to meet the rest of team 7 for dinner at Ichiraku's?" Naruto used a wicked grin signifying alternate intentions but Hinata didn’t mind, she was tired of sitting in bed all day any way’s. So she shyly nodded at her new boyfriend and moved from her bed. Naruto was completely taken by suprise to see Hinata in her pajama’s. They were silver in color and silk in material but they had a loose fit with the top only having one or two buttons buttoned and from what Naruto could see she wasn’t wearing anything under them. He couldn’t believe how cute she was! The most slight but overwhelming feeling of **** started to take him over as he hopelessly stared at her cleavage with his eye’s shifting to her naval and before she made it to changing stall in her room he took extreme notice her pant’s weren’t fully tightened. He had never seen her with that much exposed and it caused a strong shade of red to pass over his face but of course even a sight that beautiful would be interrupted with his luck. "Naruto, your…your staring." Naruto quickly tried to divert his glance "Is there something wrong Naruto?" "No… no there’s nothing wrong it’s just your so beautiful." Naruto could feel his stomach f****er and wasn’t sure if it was hunger, the thought of Sakura’s fist or the fact he was about let Hinata out of the gaze of another more primal kind of hunger he has for her. Meanwhile even though she kinda like’s the attention it’s just to much at one time. So, she quickly ducked into the bathroom to change her clothes and to calm her heart. She didn’t realize it but her innocence was making Naruto go wild inside. He couldn’t erase the thoughts of taking her in his arms, striping her of those clothes and passionately making love to her but he knew better than to act on it Hinata was more dangerous than facing an angry Sakura and he didn’t really want to have tanketsu points struck and sealed a second time around. So, they both regained composure as she changed and when she finally came out Naruto picked her up bridal style as they left in a flash. As Naruto softly landed about 10 feet from the lit up Ichiraku. He couldn’t help notice blush across Hinata’s face and as if to tease her, he leaned in and stop just short of her lips. Even though he knew she wanted him to proceed he decided to let the thought linger in her mind as he put her down. Naruto knew he had a less life or death challenge ahead of him. But it’s still pretty important nonetheless. He had to tell team 7 and even though he’s a knuckle head he really didn’t know how this would be reacted to. ~End Of Chapter~ Last edited by codecatx5 : 12-20-2009 at 08:06 PM.
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12-19-2009, 02:51 PM
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Oh great, another NaruxHina fanfic. What is with you people?
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