The True Chronicles of Naruto Uzumaki

[Valuke]

The tale goes that years ago a beast the 9-tail beast attacked the Leaf village it seemed the village was doomed if it wasn't for the fourth hokage. The tale tells that the fourth hokage was a marder and killed himself to save the villiage and he sealed the 9-tail in a child it was his child, that child was me Naruto Uzumaki. The tale everyone knows is wrong the fourth hokage was forced to kill himself and he did not have to put this curse onto his son. I took this curse and unleashed the pain of the curse off of me and onto the person who forced it. I will start my story from the beggining and you will learn the real path of Naruto Uzumaki.

http://x26.xanga.com/ceff300a2263223...z183696428.jpg

Well this is the begining of a story I am starting and planning to finish on xanga.com (im Naruto_barakat) it is just a prologue to the story what do you guys think

[Gaaraforpresident24]

Kind of tough to read and understand, I see a lot of grammer mistakes.
Seems like you took the story and put a little turn on it.

[Valuke]

Originally Posted by Gaaraforpresident24

Kind of tough to read and understand, I see a lot of grammer mistakes.
Seems like you took the story and put a little turn on it.

i know i meant to fix that later just a proliugue to the real story

[Gaaraforpresident24]

It's not bad though, im sure once you fix your grammer it will be easyier to understand!

[Shadow Shikamaru]

Originally Posted by Valuke

The tale goes that years ago a beast the 9-tail beast attacked the Leaf village it seemed the village was doomed if it wasn't for the fourth hokage. The tale tells that the fourth hokage was a marder and killed himself to save the villiage and he sealed the 9-tail in a child it was his child, that child was me Naruto Uzumaki. The tale everyone knows is wrong the fourth hokage was forced to kill himself and he did not have to put this curse onto his son. I took this curse and unleashed the pain of the curse off of me and onto the person who forced it. I will start my story from the beggining and you will learn the real path of Naruto Uzumaki.

http://x26.xanga.com/ceff300a2263223...z183696428.jpg

Well this is the begining of a story I am starting and planning to finish on xanga.com (im Naruto_barakat) it is just a prologue to the story what do you guys think

i think it's martyr, not marder.

[Valuke]

Originally Posted by Shadow Shikamaru

i think it's martyr, not marder.

are you sure but anyway thanks for the catch but what do you think.