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| Kiyoshi Hyuga |
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25 | 37.88% |
| Akira Uchiha |
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11 | 16.67% |
| Ronin Boyukochi |
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3 | 4.55% |
| Masumi Dekata |
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0 | 0% |
| Tomiko Uchiha |
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2 | 3.03% |
| Yoko Uzumaki |
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8 | 12.12% |
| Sorano Nara |
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1 | 1.52% |
| Taro Inuzuka |
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5 | 7.58% |
| Subako Aburame |
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1 | 1.52% |
| Shiro Hatake |
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10 | 15.15% |
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The Razor`s Edge
This FF takes place about 25 years into the future of the anime, and all the original genin are in there late 30's and they had kids and this is those kids story, and all the original cast has paired of with each other and had kids there are a total of 10 characters but mostly you`ll see a lot of Kiyoshi, Akira, Ronin, and Masumi because they are on the main team of this story. And here are the characters
[url]http://www.bandaicg.com/naruto/showthread.php?p=409627&posted=1#post409627[/url] Chapter 1: The Night Before It was a dark night in the village of Konoha. The moon both full and bright shinned down upon this peaceful village, and in it’s glow you can make out a figure of a person perched in a tree in his backyard staring into the endless abyss of space. He had brown hair and eyes the color of lavender he sat there reflecting on the events of the day and the ones to come. “Tomorrow is the final exam,” he said to himself in a quiet yet excited voice “I can’t wait till I become a genin” he sat there imaging what it would be like going on dangerous missions and fighting strong ninja. But his train of thought was broken when he herd “Kiyoshi, time for bed” he turned to see his mother Tenten on the porch “Kiyoshi did you hear me come on in” she said in an agitated voice “ok I’m coming” with that said Kiyoshi jumped down from the tree and walked inside but before he went in he looked up into the sky and said to him self “once I become a genin the real fun will begin” The next morning Kiyoshi woke up to the sound of his mother banging on the door “Kiyoshi wake up! Your exam is in 15 minutes and Akira is waiting for you down stairs.” Akira is a member of the Uchiha Clan and has been Kiyoshi’s best friend since they were little. Kiyoshi sat up and looked out the window next to his bed that faced the street, it was a beautiful day not a cloud in the sky. He looked down and saw Akira waiting for him “Kiyoshi hurry up we have 15 minutes to get to the academy” he said in an irritated voice. “Ok, man why is everybody always rushing me these days” Kiyoshi jumped to his feet put on his black shorts, his gray jacket, and his shoes he then ran down stairs and was about to leave when he herd “wait Kiyoshi” he turned around to see his mother standing there she was wearing her pink short sleeve shirt with the red around the end of the sleeves and her long black pants “aren’t you forgetting something” she said “No, I don’t forget things” he said in a confident voice “Are you sure?” “Ok I’ll check, lets see got my shirt, my shorts, my shoes yeah that’s everything.” Tenten put her hand on her forehead, lowered her head, and shook her head in disbelief. She then pointed at the corner where two twin swords sat. “Oh that’s right my swords” he said in a surprised voice. “I swear you would lose your head if it wasn’t attached to your body” Tenten said “So because I forgot one thing that doesn’t mean I forget all the time.” “Really then catch” Tenten tossed two small pouches at Kiyoshi. “What are these?” Kiyoshi asked confused. “Your weapons” said Tenten “What?!” Kiyoshi looked into the pouches to see they were filled with kunai, shuriken, explosion tags, and smoke bombs. “Ok so I forgot a couple of things today doesn’t mean I’m forgetful,” said Kiyoshi starting to get annoyed. “Kiyoshi” a voice from out side was calling “come on we only have 10 minutes now” “ Oh man, I forgot about Akira,” he said in a panic “Well isn’t that the understatement of the year” said Tenten in a smug way “you better hurry before your late” “Ok mom” said Kiyoshi while putting on his weapon pouches and putting the swords on his back and then he walked out the door. Akira was standing there looking at Kiyoshi with a frown on his face “We have to go now Kiyoshi if we miss this exam we’ll have to wait a whole year to retake it and I don’t want to be a Ninja academy student for a whole other year” said Akira. “Ok, ok don’t get your Sharingan in a bunch we’ll make it” said Kiyoshi. “How, we have less then 10 minutes to get there and the Academy is on the other side of the village” “Just relax and do what I do” Kiyoshi raised his hands to his chest and made a seal, and chakra began to flow from Kiyoshi’s feet “You ready” said Kiyoshi. Akira also raised his hand to his chest and made a seal and he said with smile “Yeah, you know you’re lucky I put up with you” Kiyoshi smiled and said “I could say the same about you” and with that they both raced off to the Academy. To Be Continued... Last edited by bb3000ae : 06-12-2007 at 07:17 PM. |
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I've seen you...
On that TCG site before... 10/10 for fanfic. |
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You know i like it ^_^ 10/10.
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10/10! can't wait for the next one
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Chapter 2: The First Part of the Exam
Kiyoshi and Akira arrived at the academy right as they were about to go over the rules for the test. They busted through the door of the classroom, they saw a person with a chunnin vest and a black ponytail standing in front of the class. “Your late” he said in a strong and firm voice. “We’re sorry Konohamaru-sensei” they pleaded, “We had to…” “I don’t want to hear it just take your seats” “Ok” they said as they walked to their seats in the 2nd row, they sat down and heard a voice behind call out them. “Well look who decided to show up.” They both turned around to see a girl with black eyes and long black hair staring at them. She was wearing a long red kimono with the Uchiha symbol of the sleeves, it was non other then Tomiko, Akira’s twin sister. “If your not going to take this seriously why did you both even bother to come” she said. “To watch you wall flat on your face when we pass and you don’t” Kiyoshi said jokily “No one asked you” she yelled at Kiyoshi “Well you just did” Kiyoshi said “ I swear Kiyoshi I am going to get a rusty kunai and use it to cut off your…” She was then interrupted by a loud voice coming from the front of the class “ Be quiet up there you three” they all turned around to see an angry teacher and class looking strait at them. “Now before I was so rudely interrupted” Konohamaru started to say “This test will consist of two parts a mental test and a physical test. The mental test will be a written test made up of 100 questions, and the physical test will be an obstacle course but more on that later. This test will determined who will move on to the 2nd part, so out of the 56 of you taking it only 27 will move on. Now everyone make sure your pencils are sharpened and the test will be passed out now, you may start when you get it” The test was passed down the row and Kiyoshi and Akira each took one “Ok lets see” Kiyoshi thought to himself as he read the first question “ If a ninja is at ponit A and throughs a kunai at point B which is 30ft away and is travling at a speed of 7mph how long will it take for it to reach the target.” Kiyoshi stared at it and very quietly said to himself “I’m screwed.” After three hours everyone had handed in there test, Konohamaru asked everyone to wait in the hall until the test were all graded. Kiyoshi was the last person to turn in the test he then walked into the hall and saw Akira at the end of the hall he walked up to him and they started to talk “That test was hard” Kiyoshi said looking exausted “Really I thought it was easy.” Akira said cheerfuly “How was that easy.” Kiyoshi said confused “Well I just used my Sharingan.” “ You mean you cheated” Kiyoshi said with a shock on his face “ I wouldn’t call it cheating, lets call it creative learning” Akira said “No fair when you use your kekkei genkai no one can tell, but when I use mine I get those big veins on the side of my face.” Kiyoshi said “Sucks to be you” Akira joked to try and cheer up Kiyoshi While they were focused on there conversation a figure appeared behind them, it got right up next to Kiyoshi’s ear and shouted “Hi Kiyoshi!.” They both jumped up and spung around to see a girl with light blue hair with eyes just like Kiyoshi’s and she had on a short sleeve black shirt and long navy pants she was just standing there smiling at them. “Yoko don’t do that” Kiyoshi yelled at her (Yoko is Kiyoshi’s cousin and the daughter of Hinata and Naruto.) “I`m sorry I’m just so excitied I can`t wait to find out how I did, I know I passed” she said excitedly “I hope I pass, those questions were hard” Kiyoshi said with a little dought in his voice. “Well I know I passed and that got a perfect score” Akira said with a grin on his face. “How did you manage that” Yoko asked “Easy I just copied off of Sorano” Akira said (Sorano is the daughter of Shikamaru and Temari) “You did what!” a voice yelled from behind Akira, he turned around just to see a punch hit him right in the face. The punch knocked him back, he hit the wall and fell to the floor with his back proped up agenist the wall. He lifted his head up to see a girl with black eyes and short black hair she als had on a black short sleeve kimono with a red sash around the waist, she also had a large fan on her back which was as big as her. He stood up and walked back over to her,“What was that for” he yelled at her, and without a word she punched him in the stomach. He fell to his knees and after a couple moments he stood back up “Sorano whats the matter with you, you can’t just going around punching people like” He said to her getting frustrated. “And you can’t just go around coping other peoples test papers” she yelled back “Oh, You herd that” he said “Well it doesn’t matter it won’t effect you” “Really and how is it going to look when I get the same score as an idiot like you.” She then pulled back her arm and threw a punch at Akira, he ducked and the punch missed. But what he didn`t noticed was Sorano’s kick coming right at him, and by the time he saw it it was too late and the kick landed right in the crouch. Akira let out a gasp of pain and fell to the floor holding his crouch. Sorano turned at walked away leaving Akira in pain. Kiyoshi and Yoko looked down at Akira who was still on the floor “Now you see what happens when we cheat Akira” Kiyoshi said just tring to be a pest “Shut up Kiyoshi” Akira yelled still in pain “Well” Yoko interupted “The results should be up soon we should…” but before she could finish talking she was interupted by a group of girls screeming To Be Continued…. |
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another awesome chap BB lol.^_^ 10000000000000/10.A few spelling errors but still really good ^_^.
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Chapter 3: The Second Part of the Exam
. Kiyoshi and Yoko ran down the hall to see where the screems were coming from. They then came upon a door with the words “Girl’s Restroom” where the screems were coming from. “I`ll check out whats going on” Kiyoshi said “Byakugan” he said he then pered into the room, but then he felt a fist punch him in the head he looked over to see Yoko looking mad “Kiyoshi you perv wht do you think you are doing, you just can’t look into the girls restroom” Yoko said to Kiyoshi “I wasn’t doing that to be perverted I just was tring to help.” Just then the door flew open and a young boy ran out with a dog and followed closely by a group and angry girls. They boy took off running down the hall right where Akira was, the boy then turned around to see how close the girls were and accedently triped over Akira’s body and fell to the floor and before he could get up the girls tackled him. A cloud of smoke appeared where the boys were and a few moments later the girls departed. Kiyoshi and Yoko ran down the hall to see if they could help but by the time they got there the girls were gone and all that was left was the strange boy and Akira laying on the ground with the dog laying next to the boy. The Strange boys raised from the ground and dusted him slef off and looked at Kiyoshi. The boy had blue eyes with spiky blond hair he also had some strange red marks on each side of his face, he was also wearing a black leather jacket and long black pants. Kiyoshi looked at the boy and smiled “Taro should have figured it was you, what were you doing in the girls bathroom” Kiyoshi asked even though he knew the answer. The boy reached down and picked up the dog “Akamaru. Jr ran into the restroom and I went to get him back,” Taro said in his defense “Sure you were” Kiyoshi said sarcastically “ I was” Taro said “I just…” he then looked over and saw Yoko “Oh hey Yoko didn’t see you there” he said to Yoko trying to act cool. “Taro don’t even try it, if you want to grow up to have kids you better back off” Yoko said “Why do you have to be so cold Yoko” Taro said just they a pretty girl with long yellow hair and bright blue eyes walked by them and turned the corner. “Well got to go” Taro said hastily he they ran after the girl who just walked by. “Man what is going to happen next here” Kiyoshi said “Aggh” a sound came form below them to looked down to see Akira still on the floor “Oh sorry Akira forgot you were down there” Kiyoshi said leaning down to help him to his feet, Yoko also helped. They lifted them to his feet and then they herd the voice of their teacher.” The results are up, to those who past the 1st part congrads and to those who didn`t better luck next year. The 27 of you that passed follow me to the next part of the test.” “Well let’s check them out” Yoko said, Kiyoshi and Yoko helped Akira over to the results. It was a huge board with each persons name on it in numerical order. “Lets see” Yoko said looking up and the board “Found it…I got 13!” “Hmm…I got…27!” Kiyoshi said “Yeah I passed” “Barely” Akira said, “Now…I got… Oh no” Akira said in shock “You didn`t past did you” Yoko said “No worst I got 1st” Akira said “How is that bad” Kiyoshi asked confused “Look who got 2nd” Yoko said. Kiyoshi looked up the board and scrolled to the 2nd place slot and it read “Sorano Nara.” A low grunt sound came from behind them they turned around to see Sorano Looking straight at Akira with rage in her eyes. “Well look at the time, got to get to the 2nd part” Yoko said, she then let go of Akira and took off running. “Me too” Kiyoshi said letting go of Akira, Akira fell to the floor and Kiyoshi also took off running. “Don’t leave me alone with her” Akira pleaded, but they were already gone he then noticed a dark shadow leaning over him, he turned to look and saw Sorano cracking her knuckles “Why me” Akira said Meanwhile at the 2nd stage (just behind the Academy), “Do you think we should have left Akira” Kiyoshi said “Trust me you don’t want on get on Sorano’s bad side” Yoko said Kiyoshi lowered his head to the ground “True, but I still think we should have…” “What is that” Yoko interrupted Kiyoshi raised up his head and saw a large two story black building that had no windows but several doors. “It appears to be some sort of maze” Yoko said “What makes you think that” Kiyoshi said looking over at her, it was then he saw the vein on the side of her face “Oh, that’s how” he said realizing who he was talking to. “This is strange take a look Kiyoshi” “Ok…Byakugan” Kiyoshi shouted, the veins around the side of his face began to grow and his pupils became more visible. He looked at the building and noticed a blue stream flowing through out the building “Is tha…is that chakra” Kiyoshi asked confused “ I think so, but it’s different somehow” Yoko said taking a closer look. Then without warning they were both struck on the head hard and fell to the ground, then both turned around to see Akira standing over them. “Hi Akira whats going on” Kiyoshi said nervously “ Whats going on! Whats going on! You two left me alone with that psycho chick” Akira yelled at them “Well at least you’re not hurt” Yoko said trying to calm him down “Yeah, only cause a couple of medical-nin happen to walk by and help me out” Akira said “Well at least you still pasted the test” Kiyoshi said getting up from off the ground “ I guess but I’m still mad at you and another thing…Whats that?” Akira said pointing to the big black building “It’s the next part of the test, which you three are late for,” said a voice from behind them. They turned around and saw Konohamaru-sensei with his arms crossed staring at them “They are about to go over the rules” he said “So if you don’t want to fail I suggest you hurry” “Ok” they said running to the front of the strange black building. To be continued… |
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once again awesome BB! 10000/10. ^_^
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Chapter 4: The Maze of Chakra
When they reached the front everyone was waiting there for the instructor “good where not to late “ said Kiyoshi they joined the group and as they did a man appeared out of the building. He was a tall man wearing a black suit that covered his whole body even his hair, the suit had a half yellow and half orange circle on it, he also had some sort of purple make up on his face and he was wearing a sand village headband which was odd. “Ok listen up you maggots” he said in a firm voice “ My name is Kankuro and i will be your instructor for the 2nd part, and the 2nd part of the test is about survival, out of the 27 of you here only 9 will make genin, the rest will be weeded out. Now what you will do is enter this building through one of the 27 doors behind me and you will make your way through till you get to the center of this place, but until you get there you can not use any chakra or jutsu, those who do will be automatically disqualified. You will face obstacles on your way there such as traps and your fellow ninja. So without further ado pick a door and good luck” “You herd the man, at least I think he is a man, lets get going” Kiyoshi said excitedly all three walked up to the building side by side and each one stood in front of a door they all looked at each other “Well good luck you two” Yoko said starting to open the door “Yeah what ever” Akira said still mad at them “Good luck to both of you two” said Kiyoshi and with that said they each opened their door and walked into the building ready to face whatever and whoever was waiting for them. Kiyoshi walked down the narrow corridors of the building, there was not much light so it was hard to see. As he walked he began to hear footsteps coming from up ahead, but he didn`t worry because they seemed far enough away to wear the person wouldn’t notice him. He kept walking until he came to a fork in the path, to the path to the right he could hear the footsteps but he didn`t know which path to take. He could take the left path but chances are there are traps set up in that direction, or he could take the right path where all he had to worry about was the strange footsteps. Since he couldn’t decide he reached into he pouch and pulled at a kunai and tossed it high into the air. It hit the ground with the tip pointing to the right path; he then picked up the kunai and continued down the path to the right. It wasn’t long before he could hear the footsteps again and they were getting louder, cautiously he walked down the path and as he turned the corner, up ahead around the next corner he saw a dark figure turn to the left path. Kiyoshi silently and stealthily moved fast down the path until he was at the edge of the path. Kiyoshi then unsheathed his swords and stuck one out into the path and tilted it until he could see down it and down a little bit he saw the figure of a person standing there. Kiyoshi pulled back his sword and pressed himself against the wall, his heart was pounding, his mind was racing on what he should do. Should he go around, wait till he leaves, or confront the person head on. Kiyoshi looked down and the ground trying to think he then saw the swords in his hands and remembered all the training he did, and with that he griped his swords tight and darted around the corner straight to where the person was. But when he turned the corner the person was gone, he looked around to see where he might have gone but he couldn’t see him anywhere. He walked over to where he had original saw the figure and looked around but saw no one. He wondered where he had gone but the thought left his mind when he felt the cold steel of a kunai at his throat and the warm breath of the attacker on his neck. Kiyoshi froze in fear as the kunai’s grip got tighter around his neck “To slow” the attacker said in a quiet low voice. “That’s what you think” Kiyoshi said as he brought his left leg back and wrapped it around the attacker leg knocking him off balance, the attacker did a cartwheel backwards to put a little distance between the two. Kiyoshi turned around to where he could final get a good look at the attacker, he had black spiky hair and was wearing a small ripped up black jacket. He also had bandages around left arm and had silver gauntlets on both arms. But what caught Kiyoshi’s attention the most were the attackers eyes, his eyes had no pupils they were just completely white. “Not bad” the attacker said getting up from doing his cartwheel “But lets see if you can fight” he said holding out his arm and gesturing for Kiyoshi to attack. Kiyoshi took a fighting stance and charged at the stranger, he got right in front of him and raised the sword in his right hand high and brought it down fast and hard. But the stranger raised his left arm and stopped the attack with his gauntlet; Kiyoshi still determined took the sword in his left hand and swung at the stranger’s side. The stranger then jumped up in the air and brought his right foot down on top of the sword knocking it to the ground and with his free leg kicked Kiyoshi in the face sending him back and causing him to drop his swords. Kiyoshi landed on his back and slide down the hall, he then raised himself up and wiped the blood coming out of his mouth he then saw that he was missing his swords. He looked around to see where they were but couldn’t find them he then herd the voice of the stranger “Looking for these”. Kiyoshi look to where he was to see him holding his swords. “Give those back” Kiyoshi demanded getting angry at the sight of his prized possessions being held by him. “I think I’ll hold on to these for awhile” the stranger said “But I’ll give them back if you can catch me”, then he dashed off in the opposite direction laugh as he did. Kiyoshi fueled with rage ran after him he followed him for a while they made a left, then a right, and then two lefts, followed by three rights. It started to seem hopeless but then Kiyoshi noticed the stranger was starting to slow down “But why?” he thought. It was then Kiyoshi was right on his heels and then as Kiyoshi followed him around the corner, the stranger jumped out from behind it with his swords raised high and he brought them down on Kiyoshi. To be Continued... |
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