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Old 10-18-2006, 01:56 PM
Lil Hinata Lil Hinata is offline
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I like it 10/10 and it was pretty funny and I mean the whole story expecily Lee and Tenten lol.



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Old 11-24-2006, 11:01 PM
Shinobi_Guyver Shinobi_Guyver is offline
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The sequel has been unleashed! If it's anything like your last rewrite, you'll have lots of people waiting for an ending. Yet, for now: Rating: 8/10
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Old 11-25-2006, 04:38 PM
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Heh, This chapter is pretty funny, Let's see what'll happen...


Chapter 4

"For the next couple of days, most of our regular trainers will be out on missions so we needed all of you to take their place while they are gone." Kennichi began passing papers to the Konoha Ninjas. "No need to worry, we have the schedules planned out already, you just need to follow the agenda."

"I see," Neji briefly scanned over the paper before returning his emotionless eyes back to Kennichi.

"There are fourty-two students that have to be instructed so with the eight of use we can have four groups with roughly 10 students each."

"Oooo, me, me, me." Lee reached high with his hand to signal he had something to say. "Which means we will be working in pairs, right?"

Kennichi raised his brow and quickly answered him. "Yeah, it does. Now, how are we going to split ourselves up?"

"I don't want to go with Neji." Lee pointed his chin up, taking on a more serious demeanor. "I'll prove to him that I can train my students better than him."

A long silence endured.

"....uh..."

"Well I'll go with you then, Lee-kun!" Yoriko said with a wink.

"Then I guess I'll go with Tenten-chan." Yuzuru added. "You have no objection right?"

"Uhh.. of course not." Tenten leaned back nervously.

"Neji and I will be another pair, which leaves Naruto and Hinata as the last group." Kennichi said summing it up.

"Alright! Hinata we'll show those students how good a teacher Naruto-sensei is." Naruto exclaimed, laughing confidently to himself.

"Then it's decided, here are the papers. We start the classes tomorrow. Get some rest and be at the Academy at six." Kennichi finished. "Dismissed."

"Hey Lee, let's hang together for the day, since we'll be working together right?" Yoriko asked as she leaned on his shoulder.

"Does this mean...." Lee began to ask. Date?

"Sure if you don't mind." She replied withour much care.

Chaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!! Oh yeah! That's right Neji, I have one too now!! Lee was jumping around crazily. Yeeeeeaah!!! I am in my Springtime of Youth. He did his "Nice Guy Pose" and his teeth sparkled.

Tenten slapped her head and then shook her head at his stupidity as the two left the room.

"Shall we do the same?" Yuzuru asked Tenten.

Tenten froze. "What....did...you....just...say?"

"Shall we do the same as Lee and Yoriko?"

She let out a long sigh. "I give up. Let's go." They too left. Leaving other four to sort out their days.

Neji looked at Kennichi warily.

"I have some business to take care of." Kennichi said. "I don't want to keep you from what you really want to do."

"Whatever do you mean?" Neji couldn't resist a grin.

"Exactly." Kennichi said as he left.

"Well, guys." Neji began to say to Naruto and Hinata. "You two can do whatever you want until tomorrow. Remember not to break any laws while around here, we don't want trouble in a foreign village. Ja!"

The door slid closed as Neji left. Only Hinata and Naruto remained in the room.

Naruto scratched his head. "Hmmmm, what to do...."

"Umm...Naru..to.." Hinata struggled to speak. "May..be we could..."

"TRAIN!!!" Naruto said suddenly. "PERFECT IDEA HINATA, I KNEW YOU WERE A HARD WORKER!!!"

"...uhh..okay.."

Naruto stopped. "Hmm? Is something wrong?"

"Oh no." Hinata smiled as best she could. "Let's go."

Naruto stood there as if processing what she just said. "ALRIGHT, LET'S GOOOOOO!!!!!"

End of Chapter 4

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Old 11-25-2006, 05:27 PM
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Whaddayaknow? Another post! Have fun, this one's 100% new!!!!


Chapter 5

Naruto stared up at the sky with little interest desperately tried to find a solution to his predicament. He had jumped over the village walls to train in the surrounding forest, but realized, with the help of Hinata, that they would not be able to get back over without getting attacked. They were foreign Ninjas after all. Who wouldn't attack if they saw a blond boy wearing an orange jacket in the middle of the summer jump over their wall?

The two had practiced the difficult art of chakra control. While Naruto had refined his Rasengan, Hinata worked on releasing chakra from certain parts of her body. It was a strenuous task and the two were drained only after about an hour of work.

Naruto had tried to give it a little more work and used up all of the chakra in his body, a rare feat. Though he felt nothing painful, his body felt heavier and less willing to move than before. Lucky for them, they had their baggage with them and were able to replenish some of their energy with the leftover rations from their trip.

"Ahhhhhh" Naruto moaned as he failed another attempt to lift his arm. Because he could barely move, Hinata had to feed him.

"Don't push yourself anymore" Hinata scolded behind a blush. As embarrassing a pleasure it was she did not want to shorten it.

"Sorry again, Hinata." Naruto repeated as he opened his mouth for another bite. "I'll make it up to you someday."

Hinata blushed an even brighter red and turned away to hide it as if looking for something in her bag. Without a reply, Naruto thought about it more.

"Hmm... Maybe I'll buy you Ramen when we get back." Hinata's head drooped in defeat.

She turned back after fighting back the redness in her face and sought to change the subject and, hopefully, the mood. "So we should really try to get back over into the village. We can't camp out here."

"Well, I was thinking we try sneak over when the guards aren't looking."

"But, Naruto, those guards are Chuunin and Jounin level, how are we supposed to get by them unnoticed?"

Naruto gave the problem some thought but dismissed it. "There's no other way, we have to do it."

*Later…*

Naruto climbed the steep side of the wall, making sure not to excite any noise. He peered over his shoulder to make sure Hinata was still there. And she was, watching him careful from the branches of a nearby tree.

No one had noticed them yet, which was a good sign if they hoped to pull it off. The two had gone over hand signals for when the area was clear or not and as soon as Naruto's strength had recovered enough, they started the plan.

He had reached the edge of the summit and again looked over his shoulder to receive the command. She signaled "no", so he waited.

She continued to give him the no sign for a long time and Naruto began to wonder if there really was someone up there. He didn't hear anything. So what's the deal? When is that guy going to move?

Naruto soon grew impatient and after another minute, he decided to see for himself. As he let his head rise over to check, he came face to face with another man's. Before he could even yell for help, the man grabbed him and yanked him over.

End of Chapter 5

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Old 11-25-2006, 05:51 PM
Kyuubi_Powah! Kyuubi_Powah! is offline
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I'm a big fan of your stories SK Keep on writing 9.5/10
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Old 11-25-2006, 06:36 PM
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Thanks for the praise man, I appreciate it.
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Old 11-25-2006, 06:38 PM
Kyuubi_Powah! Kyuubi_Powah! is offline
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No problem I'm anticipating Chapter 6.
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Old 11-27-2006, 02:16 PM
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Chapter Six soon? Rating: 8.3/10
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Old 02-04-2007, 07:58 PM
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Sorry for all those who still read this. I just stopped abruptly and didn't return. I guess I should finish this fanfic before I stop yeah? Hmm, this chapter turned out to be quite short.


Chapter 6

"Heeey!! Let me go, you." Naruto kicked wildly, but it did nothing to ease his captors grip on him.

The guard grinned at the boy's futile attempts. "What have we here? A trouble maker?"

"Oi, Oi. I'm from Konoha, see the headband?" He pointed desperately to his forhead protector, which was covered by the man's enormous hand. "Lemmi go!"

The man dropped the boy to the ground, half-expecting him to take off, but he didn't. "You are right, but even if Konoha and the Sora-Gakure are allies, you need a pass to enter the village."

"Oh, yeah, I have that." Naruto began to dig in his pockets. He revealed his pass to the guard and snickered. "Hehe, I told you."

The guard looked at him wearily. "If you had this, you could have just entered through the front gate instead of trying to hop the wall."

Naruto froze at the man's words. "Uh.. heh.. Oh, yeah, I could've done that..."

*Elsewhere*

"Date! Date! Date!" Lee chanted as he hopped in front of the group.

"Would you shut up already!" Tenten kicked him hard in the side, sending him flying. "Your stupid little chant is stuck in my head now!"

"Are you jealous?" Yoriko smiled.

Tenten paused as if she was actually thinking about it then waved off the comment. "Not at all!"

Yoriko laughed with delight. "Why don't we split here? I'll take Lee around and you can stick with Yuzuru for the rest of the day."

Tenten hesitated, but decided to ask anyway. "Well, um, Where are we going to sleep?"

"Oh, yes, that is very important." Yuzuru began. "All of you going to stay witht he Meizora family for the night. Don't worry, we will make sure you get there tonight."

"What about Naruto?" Tenten had to ask, though she could care less what happened to that dork. Hmm, well Hinata's with him. Poor girl... "And Hinata?"

He looked off and said nothing. Tenten thought he didn't hear her, but then he answered "Hmmm, that's right, Naruto and Hinata, was it? They don't have any guides. I'll go look for them and make sure they know what's going on."

Without waiting for any form of acknowledgement, he jumped onto a nearby building and disappeared.

"So Tenten." Yoriko leaned on her shoulder. "Guess you have to stick with us for now."

"Date! Date! Date!"

Tenten sighed heavily and followed the two from behind.

End of Chapter 6
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Old 02-05-2007, 05:34 AM
Shinobi_Guyver Shinobi_Guyver is offline
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"Date! Date! Date!... Date! Date! Date!" -- Rock Lee.

See, this is why Lee rocks.

EDIT: YAUS! AN UPDATE! *remembers* oh yeah, I gotta work on mine: [URL="http://www.bandaicg.com/naruto/showthread.php?t=11180"]Shizuku Mihami: The Ninja Who Eluded Death[/URL] TheLegendarySucker started it, and I get to finish it.

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