Naruto - Generation "X"

[SharinganHeir]

Originally Posted by MJM

Thanks for the motivation.

No problem... keep up the good work?

J/k, you're welcome.

When should we expect the next chapter? do you have a lot of these already written and ready to go?

[hokage333]

this FF is pretty awsome.....
Dramatic tension, Suspense, ect, ect is all shown.

Its very well written, so i dont have much to critisize.

All i can really say is that some other side details like:

What happened to the original Akatsuki, Kabuto, and Team Hawk
WHo is still alive and such
And is teh 9-Tails out of naruto, or did Madara almost suceed, or somthing like that.

other than than, the FF is brilliant, keep on writing.

[BigBlackoftheBlueRoses]

if anyone dint notice MJM got banned

[Sharingan_Warrior5693]

Originally Posted by BigBlackoftheBlueRoses

if anyone dint notice MJM got banned

It was only a 10 day ban.

[BigBlackoftheBlueRoses]

Originally Posted by Sharingan_Warrior5693

It was only a 10 day ban.

do you know for what?

[Sharingan_Warrior5693]

Originally Posted by BigBlackoftheBlueRoses

do you know for what?

He todl me it was for harrasing pyrot.

[MJM]

Hmm, I seemed to have been missed.

I'm back, nonetheless.

I would continue but I am currently rushing and running around with my head off trying to play test and get together a deck for SJC PA. If you don't find many updates from now until the 25th of July, you'll know why.

However, I do wish to be writing some of this on my way down to the SJC on my laptop so I'll probably have an installment ready when I get back.

[Lil Hinata]

Interesting enough, it has sparked my interest. You're a good writer, using plenty of details and such. Just what a good fan fiction needs. I see no mistakes, but a few spelling or grammer mistakes every once ina while, but no one is completely perfect. I think you sould continue on with this, you have a good opener and beginning.

[MJM]

Thanks everyone, rest assured that its not over. I'm rigorously playtesting for SJC PA that is only one week away!

[Roshi Mandrake]

it was very detailed, and suspensful. However you could greatly improve your work by completing reactions and responses. For instance, when Udon threw the kunai at the akustki members you didn't write thier reaction to it. The reader simply infers how they reacted based upon the amount of time the protaganist's were given to engage in dialogue.